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​​بعد از این جمله موضوعی(topic sentence) را یاد گرفتیم وقتش شده که بریم سراغ وحدت پاراگراف. فکر میکنی به چه معناست؟
همبستگی و اتحاد پاراگراف یعنی هرچیزی که مطرح میکنیم در پیوسگی و اتحاد با جمله موضوعی(topic sentence) باشد. فرضاً داریم در مورد خسته کننده ترین کلاسی که داشتیم حرف می زنیم، یک دفعه میشه مثلا به جذاب ترین جلسه هم اشاره کرد؟ طبیعتاً همچین چیزی خارج از جمله موضوعی است. هر چیزی که ما بیان میکنیم باید از ایده ی اصلی ما حمایت کند. در این مثال جذاب ترین جلسه در تعارض با ادعای اصلی ما یعنی خسته کننده بودن کلاس است. پس مربوط نیست و نباید بیان شود
به این مثال دقت کنید، میتونید بگید کجا وحدت پاراگراف از بین رفت؟

My most frustrating job was cooking for a local fast food restaurant during my junior year in high school. No matter how hard I tried, I never could cook what the menu said because the food company always delivered the wrong food or brought it late. I also was frustrated because I had trouble estimating how much food to cook. Many times we ran short of hamburgers or had to throw away pounds and pounds of french fries. Sometimes we ate the extra french fries, though, and we’d sit around, joking and having a good time. The worst thing, however, was the condition of my clothes after the meal was over. Even if I hadn’t spilled anything (and I usually had spilled some kind of sauce), my clothes smelled awful. I’d want to go home to change before going anyplace else. Some of the managers also spilled food and wanted to change, too. No wonder, then, I thought cooking in a fast food restaurant was frustrating.

دوتا از جمله با جمله موضوعی(topic sentence) وحدت ندارد. جمله اول جایی که میگوید میشستیم و سیب زمینی میخوردیم و جمله دوم زمانی که مدیرها نیز لباس هاشون کثیف میشه و مجبوراً عوضش کنند. هر دو ربطی به topic sentence یعنی "آزاردهنده ترین شغلی که داشتم" ندارد.
بیاین پاراگراف رو تحلیل کنیم ببینیم چیکار کرده:

Topic sentence: My job as cook was frustrating.
Support Wrong food was delivered.
Support I had trouble estimating amounts.
Support Had fun eating extra food.
Support My clothes were messy. Support Managers wanted to change clothes, too.
​​​​​​​Conclusion Therefore, my job as cook was frustrating.

همانطور که مشاهده میکنید حمایت 3 و 5 غیر مربوط است، حالا بیاید درستش را بنویسیم:

My most frustrating job was cooking for a local fast food restaurant during my junior year in high school. No matter how hard I tried, I never could cook what the menu said because the food company always delivered the wrong food or brought it late. I also was frustrated because I had trouble estimating how much food to cook. Many times we ran short of hamburgers or had to throw away pounds and pounds of french fries. The worst thing, however, was the condition of my clothes after the meal was over. Even if I hadn’t spilled anything (and I usually had spilled some kind of sauce), my clothes smelled awful. I’d want to go home to change before going anyplace else. No wonder, then, I thought cooking in a fast food restaurant was frustrating

دقت میکنید؟ متن دائما در حال تقویت topic sentence هست.
پس به راحتی میتوانید وحدت پاراگراف را حفظ کنید. فقط در راستای تقویت topic sentence بنویسید. اگر چیزی به ذهنتون رسید که دید فقط لغت قوی دارید برای بیانش ولی ربطی به ادعای اصلی پارگراف ندارد. بی خیالش شوید.